dagosan's haiku diary: I: 025

Wednesday, December 21, 2005

snow-covered river
not one human
in sight

snow-covered river
cattails
nodding

solstice sun
behind gray clouds
snow-covered river

At December 21, 2005 3:34 PM, Anonymous said...: david,

my offering.

ed

winter river
the stepping stones linked
by thin ice
At December 21, 2005 4:26 PM, Anonymous said...: david, maybe better this way...

winter river
thin ice
l
i
n
k
s
the stepping stones

ed
At December 21, 2005 6:32 PM, david giacalone said...: I like both, Edward. My edit:

winter river
thin ice
__between___stepping__stones__
At December 21, 2005 7:03 PM, Anonymous said...: david,

your edit is very good. my

thinking seems to be too

traditional these days.

ed

here's the same river, different

season...

playing him,
the old trout leads me into
a thicket of thorns